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I had a dog, once. For all the world, she resembled a Pomeranian, and she was a dead ringer for the runner-up at Westminster. I bought her for five dollars. Had it not been for a Chow two generations back, she would have been what they consider “pure”, and could have easily been sold for several thousand. This one stud was a blip in her standard, a dead fly in a glass of champagne.

Last week, she appeared on my doorstep, quite obviously dead. There was no note, no notice of someone taking responsibility, and certainly no trace of where her head went. It was a bit of a mess, and the cleanup took longer than I had anticipated. I still hadn’t, still haven’t recovered from my last loss.

And tonight, I’m kneeling inside her doghouse. I haven’t been inside it since we first built it. For the first time, I can see just how badly warped the inside was. The urine smell has soaked deep into the wood and I can only imagine how bad the smell would be if it were fresh. I can’t help but feel like I let that little girl down, by allowing her home to fall into such disarray. The carpet of her house is brown. The grass is dead. My dog is dead. My father is

The wood gives a little with the force of my punch, leaving the smallest of cracks in the back portion of the house. My knuckles take the worst of it, and the pain shoots up my arm like fire. The middle knuckle has split open, and is dripping blood down my middle finger. I try to hold it in, but I’ve finally hit my limit. Like a dam finally bursting, the tears come.

“Goddammit,” I spit. And suddenly I realize that I’m on my knees, my head hung low, hands clasped together. For all its venom, my curse looks like a prayer, offered in reverence in this low-ceiling sanctuary that smells of dog piss. I can’t help but laugh. I’m a child again, snotty and red-eyed, praying for the world to make sense again. Those were the times that my father would come in, and lay one of his hands on my shoulder. His hands were huge, but even as a child I welcomed his touch.

“I miss you so much, Dad.”

When it starts to rain, nobody calls me inside.
A short piece I wrote up for the second round of the writing tournament over at :iconwriters--club:

I'm rather fond of the imagery in this one.
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Given 2013-07-28
I had a dog, once. by *doctordapples packs a punch. ( Featured by neurotype )
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TwistedAlyx Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This one stud was a blip in her standard, a dead fly in a glass of champagne. :heart:

And I love how sudden--like a slap-- paragraph 2 comes on.
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doctordapples Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013
Thank you very much!
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Minueau Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
this was so very powerful. Thank you.
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WeasleyWoman Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Exactly how I felt when I lost my doggies. RIP Ruby n' Suzie. 
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doctordapples Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2013
Sorry for your loss.
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WeasleyWoman Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
It's ok, it was years ago. :)
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PINEAPPLEGREASE Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013
This is fantastic! 
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Shawnthepokemon Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
WHAAAAAAAAAAA?! The dog was his dad?!
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josh-5410 Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
THEN WHO WAZ DOG
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Shawnthepokemon Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Apparently his dad.
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doctordapples Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013
DO HO HO
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SkeletonsBasements Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
The regret for the dog, and the mirrors the regret for the dad in this case. And the regret for the nobody finding them.
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PoppetthePuppet101 Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2013
I was about to say "I'm sorry about what happened to your dog" but then I read on & noticed it wasn't real.
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doctordapples Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2013
Are you sorry about my fictional dog?
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PoppetthePuppet101 Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2013
No, at first I thought you were one of those kinds of people, where you share your whole life with people you don't know, but then as I got about in the middle, I noticed it wasn't real.
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YoYobuddy Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
feeeeeeeels...
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Lupina24 Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Absolutely wonderful. You put words to raw doubts, regrets and losses. I love the description of the inside of the doghouse. I can just feel the poignancy of regret so vividly there, like almost hearing the owner say 'Why didn't I do more or take better care of her?' This really hits home with me from losing a good dog. You have a beautiful gift with words, keep it up!
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doctordapples Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2013
Thank you so much!
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Lupina24 Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
The pleasure was mine. Keep up the good work.
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Briar2350 Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2013
Incredible job. Truly touching.

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MaxterandKiwiKing Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
No words, just feelings of pity.
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HoverBoardFan14 Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
the feels on the bus go round and round... 
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LadyBrookeCelebwen Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is very well written. The emotions hit hard.
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polaris6254 Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2013  Hobbyist
:( this makes  me feel sad... 
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Dj-Vaporeon Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is so sad and well written.... :iconcryforeverplz:
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pearwood Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Beautifully written.  My dad's in hospice these days, the long wait.
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doctordapples Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2013
My thoughts are with your family. Good luck to you and him.
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Ornated Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2013  Student General Artist
Excellence! - Congratulations for the DD!

That last line is really the icing on the cake. I like this very much, well done.
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anonprincess11 Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2013  Hobbyist
woah! nice job. My feels weren't really on the floor e=with this, but it was very well written! :D
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MermaidInDisguise Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This was incredible. It's rare that a piece brings me to the verge of tears in so few paragraphs. Very well written.
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shadows-play Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is amazing, it really hit home hard.
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Karinta Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2013  Student General Artist
Wow...... what a powerful poem. It has a visceral impact, but a subtle one underneath as well. :huggle:
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doctordapples Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2013
Thank you!
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Karinta Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Student General Artist
You're welcome.
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RoumaCisum Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, I love the way you portray the emotion and connect the two losses. It's so real, I'm sure anyone can relate in some way. Great job and good luck with the tournament. (ps. very fond of the imagery as well!)
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doctordapples Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2013
Unfortunately, lost the tournament, but am still quite pleased with this one.
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blessedarrow Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2013
Wow, this is beautiful. I faved it. Congrats on your well deserved DD.
How did the tournament go?
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doctordapples Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2013
Humorously enough, this was my entry for the round I lost.
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blessedarrow Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2013
Aww, well at least you got a DD out of it =P
And many people saying it beautiful and well written so you know there's nothing wrong with it :)
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
    Congrats on the DD! :dalove:
    Have a nice day! :heart:
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doctordapples Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2013
Hopefully I'll get another!
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madgenius2013 Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Incredible work.
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doctordapples Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2013
Thanks!
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xMJJMoonwalker Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Aww ;-; This is really good writing. It almost made me cry.
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doctordapples Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2013
I appreciate the kind words.
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xMJJMoonwalker Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome, my friend.
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FedoraforaHalo Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2013
Oh wow...I'm really glad I could read this. You deserve the DD. Powerful story :)
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doctordapples Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2013
Thank you so much!
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XiwyCain Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2013
Amazing O_O
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doctordapples Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2013
thank you!
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